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Legendary trainer Elizabeth

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Here's Elizabeth's Profile:

Name: Elizabeth.
Age: 30.
City: Sage village.
Type of Pokemon: Any type.
Hobbies: Nothing special.
Likes: Her family. Her student.
Dislikes: Nothing special.

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:star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Overall
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:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
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:star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Impact

As a female looking at this, and your gallery, it kind of begs the question whether or not you're objectifying your female characters.

There's nothing wrong with fanservice, and I'm no feminist, but if you want a critique, I'm going to have you point out that her breasts are far too big, and her legs are much too long. If there's anything glaring wrong about this, it's your anatomy.

Her expression seems very, very vague, and I can't be sure what she's thinking. I also don't know why she's biting her hair for no good reason. (She might be nervous, or scared, but there's nothing else in the image that might suggest she's afraid.) That seems a little silly.

Her eyes are a bother. Heterochromia's much, much too overused in character design - and usually it's just to make the character look interesting or edgy. Sure, it might be tied to her backstory - she might be 'cursed' or something, I have no honest clue - but it doesn't add anything to her character beyond the aesthetic level. Even then, heterochromia's such an overused character trope, you're just making her look like an OC stereotype.

I'm also going to have to point out that, as a pokemon trainer, her outfit is impractical for travel. Her cleavage would leave her chest exposed and scarred if she had to run though shrubbery. Her shirt is much too tight to be comfortable for long-haul bus/train/boat rides, and her tie serves no purpose but to hang around her neck and drop off when she runs.

Sure, you might argue that she's a sationary soul - she stays put in one city - and I'll accept that as justification for her skimpy outfit. But if she's a teacher or a mentor figure, I'm also going to have to point out that a school or learning establishment's dress code wouldn't condone her exposed chest or belly button. Also, as a parent to a child under her, I would question the level of trust I can place upon her. Simply put, they wouldn't let a skank tutor or guide their son or daughter.

You do have a very very interesting idea in the fact that she's well above the average trainer age. She's no teenager - she's a thirty-year-old woman - and you can get a lot of interesting story ideas with something like that. I like that a lot.

However, when it comes to her personality, there is nothing to comment on. She literally is blank. How can a human being have no hobbies? Can you say you have no hobbies? What about surfing the internet, or drawing? What does she dislike? The taste of avocado? The noisy neighbour that watches tv at two in the morning? These tiny details may seem insignificant, but they're part of what makes a character a character - turning her into a real human being we can empathize with, and not just an image on our screen,.

It seems unrealistic that she doesn't have interests or even dislikes, and may suggest not very much thought went into making her.

Ultimately, you have a decent style, a good basic idea and a wonderful colour scheme going on. Keep it up, but bear in mind that a character isn't just there to appeal to you, but should also be a fleshed out human being a reader can relate to.