Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login
×




Details

Submitted on
February 2, 2012
Image Size
792 KB
Resolution
1865×2590
Link
Thumb
Embed

Stats

Views
1,568
Favourites
89 (who?)
Comments
49
Downloads
75
×
Legendary trainer Elizabeth by Lucky-JJ Legendary trainer Elizabeth by Lucky-JJ
Here's Elizabeth's Profile:

Name: Elizabeth.
Age: 30.
City: Sage village.
Type of Pokemon: Any type.
Hobbies: Nothing special.
Likes: Her family. Her student.
Dislikes: Nothing special.

Download for full size.

Elizabeth © :iconlucky-jj:
Add a Comment:
 
:iconwanlingnic:
As a female looking at this, and your gallery, it kind of begs the question whether or not you're objectifying your female characters.

There's nothing wrong with fanservice, and I'm no feminist, but if you want a critique, I'm going to have you point out that her breasts are far too big, and her legs are much too long. If there's anything glaring wrong about this, it's your anatomy.

Her expression seems very, very vague, and I can't be sure what she's thinking. I also don't know why she's biting her hair for no good reason. (She might be nervous, or scared, but there's nothing else in the image that might suggest she's afraid.) That seems a little silly.

Her eyes are a bother. Heterochromia's much, much too overused in character design - and usually it's just to make the character look interesting or edgy. Sure, it might be tied to her backstory - she might be 'cursed' or something, I have no honest clue - but it doesn't add anything to her character beyond the aesthetic level. Even then, heterochromia's such an overused character trope, you're just making her look like an OC stereotype.

I'm also going to have to point out that, as a pokemon trainer, her outfit is impractical for travel. Her cleavage would leave her chest exposed and scarred if she had to run though shrubbery. Her shirt is much too tight to be comfortable for long-haul bus/train/boat rides, and her tie serves no purpose but to hang around her neck and drop off when she runs.

Sure, you might argue that she's a sationary soul - she stays put in one city - and I'll accept that as justification for her skimpy outfit. But if she's a teacher or a mentor figure, I'm also going to have to point out that a school or learning establishment's dress code wouldn't condone her exposed chest or belly button. Also, as a parent to a child under her, I would question the level of trust I can place upon her. Simply put, they wouldn't let a skank tutor or guide their son or daughter.

You do have a very very interesting idea in the fact that she's well above the average trainer age. She's no teenager - she's a thirty-year-old woman - and you can get a lot of interesting story ideas with something like that. I like that a lot.

However, when it comes to her personality, there is nothing to comment on. She literally is blank. How can a human being have no hobbies? Can you say you have no hobbies? What about surfing the internet, or drawing? What does she dislike? The taste of avocado? The noisy neighbour that watches tv at two in the morning? These tiny details may seem insignificant, but they're part of what makes a character a character - turning her into a real human being we can empathize with, and not just an image on our screen,.

It seems unrealistic that she doesn't have interests or even dislikes, and may suggest not very much thought went into making her.

Ultimately, you have a decent style, a good basic idea and a wonderful colour scheme going on. Keep it up, but bear in mind that a character isn't just there to appeal to you, but should also be a fleshed out human being a reader can relate to.
What do you think?
The Artist thought this was FAIR
29 out of 31 deviants thought this was fair.

The Artist has requested Critique on this Artwork

Please sign up or login to post a critique.

:iconmitzuharu:
Mitzuharu Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
a button up shirt and a tie! <3 I love her....
Reply
:iconlucky-jj:
Lucky-JJ Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
^^ thanks.
Reply
:iconmitzuharu:
Mitzuharu Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
.....shes an OC, right?.....a pokemon one?.....may I draw her?
Reply
:iconlucky-jj:
Lucky-JJ Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
yes,yes and yes
Reply
:iconerinilla:
Erinilla Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012
:babea: *¬*
Reply
:iconlucky-jj:
Lucky-JJ Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
^^ supuse que querías verla un poco más retocada. dada la crítica que recibí acerca de este dibujo, estoy un poco susceptible con él. siento que lo hice bien, pero dado que es también tu personaje, quisiera saber tu opinión 100% franca.
Reply
:iconerinilla:
Erinilla Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012
mira; me detuve a leer la crítica para poder darte argumentos en contra o a favor de eso. (Lo intenté lo más que pude pero no soy 100% buena con el inglés así que es lo que capté.)

-Estilo de dibujo y blah blah, eso ya lo tenemos conversado.
-Sobre su expresión; dudo que haya leído alguna vez tu fic y sepa realmente como es Elizabeth. No te preocupes por eso, ella siempre ha sido seria y le cuesta mostrar sus emociones, no?
-Sobre sus ojos diferentes; yo siempre entendí que es una forma de representar su doble personalidad, no? Si me equivoco corrígeme :P así que no habría problema con ello
-Lo siguiente, y creo que voy a tocar varios puntos de lo que dijo el "crítico". Si bien me he acostumbrado al diseño de la nueva Eli, yo te comenté en un comienzo que me la había imaginado con un look más "adulto" por decirlo de alguna forma (si, creo que te lo dije). No hay que olvidar que ya es una mujer de 30 años, incluso Gasú se ve mucho más seria y eso que su personalidad no lo es. Y siento que aunque su cabello volvió a crecer y tiene un estilo un poquito más maduro, no representa su edad y eso es como chocante (ya se que viene de la villa y que no envejecen a la misma velocidad y blah; así que te lo acepto).
-Y su personalidad; que se meta su sicología donde le quepa xD! es un fic y una historia de tú creación; los humanos de TU historia no tienen por qué tener las mismas características que un humano real :3 (existen muchos personajes en mangas y comics que simplemente no tienen personalidad propia)



Y eso creo que sería todo. :)!
Reply
:iconlucky-jj:
Lucky-JJ Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Gracias, linda. significa mucho para mi ^^
Reply
:iconerinilla:
Erinilla Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012
^-^ de nada; sabes que cuentas conmigo~~
Reply
:iconlucky-jj:
Lucky-JJ Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
por cierto, aún te debo tu dibujo de cumpleaños, pero debo admitir que no se me ocurrió qué dibujarte. asi que me gustaria que tu me dijera (no me digas que te sorprenda, ya me libro de esa responsabilidad de pensar XD)
Reply
:iconerinilla:
Erinilla Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012
Puedo ponerme exigente? me gustaría tener un mini capitulo de alguna de tus historias centrado solo en mi pj >////< y si te dale algún dibujo de eso; pues mejor aun =P
pero solo si es posible!!! no quiero agobiarte más >o<
Reply
:iconlucky-jj:
Lucky-JJ Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
un mini capitulo de balmung o del fic de pokemon?
Reply
(1 Reply)
:iconerinilla:
Erinilla Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012
me corrijo a mi misma xD no te había mencionado lo de su look >o<! tonta yo.
Reply
:iconeinstrigger:
Einstrigger Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
uy! se ve muy seria! aun tiene esos lindos lapsus de personalidad?
Reply
:iconlucky-jj:
Lucky-JJ Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Claro que sí. qué seria de elizabeth sin su doble personalidad?
Reply
:iconeinstrigger:
Einstrigger Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
yay!!! lastima que mi OC esta muerto en el dic!! seria interesante ver como lambas se lo despachan con sus interesantes y sarcasticas frases(mas por erina)XD
Reply
:iconlucky-jj:
Lucky-JJ Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
hehehhe, mírale el lado positivo. eins murió siendo un heroe.
Reply
:iconeinstrigger:
Einstrigger Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
je je, bueno, eso sip!
Reply
:iconxbox-3:
xbox-3 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
good job
Reply
:iconlucky-jj:
Lucky-JJ Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
^^ thanks
Reply
:iconleviadragon99:
leviadragon99 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012
Huh... why the differently coloured eyes... is there an actual reason for it or effect it has or just because it looks cool?
Reply
:iconlucky-jj:
Lucky-JJ Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
She has split personality
Reply
:iconicyshadowlord:
Icyshadowlord Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012
That's one hot special trainer :3
Reply
:iconlucky-jj:
Lucky-JJ Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
hehehe, yeah.
Reply
:icondeadcobra:
DeadCobra Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012
Sweet
Reply
:iconshadow-chaos00:
Shadow-Chaos00 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012   Traditional Artist
Me encanta su diseño, man. |3
Bien hecho.
Reply
:iconlucky-jj:
Lucky-JJ Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
^^ gracias, amigo.
Reply
:iconshadow-chaos00:
Shadow-Chaos00 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012   Traditional Artist
De nada, man. =)
Reply
:iconsergeantgrif:
SergeantGrif Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012
awesome. :3
Reply
:iconlucky-jj:
Lucky-JJ Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
^^ thank you.
Reply
:iconsergeantgrif:
SergeantGrif Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012
welcome. :3
Reply
:iconminimandy12:
minimandy12 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012   Artisan Crafter
cool
Reply
:iconlucky-jj:
Lucky-JJ Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thanks
Reply
:iconminimandy12:
minimandy12 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012   Artisan Crafter
ok
Reply
:icondragonkingmark:
Dragonkingmark Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012
i wonder if she'll take an apprentice?
Reply
:iconlucky-jj:
Lucky-JJ Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
she already has one.
Reply
:icondragonkingmark:
Dragonkingmark Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012
really? cool
Reply
:iconmeleemovies:
meleemovies Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012
lightly buttoned shirt! I can't concentrate on the battle!!!!
Reply
:iconlucky-jj:
Lucky-JJ Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
well you gotta try harder.
Reply
:iconmeleemovies:
meleemovies Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012
DAMN!!
Reply
:iconaeronator:
Aeronator Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
She can train me. :3
Reply
:iconlucky-jj:
Lucky-JJ Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
lol, I don't think so.
Reply
:iconaeronator:
Aeronator Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
aww. oh well. lol
Reply
Add a Comment: